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    LokiBeragist

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    Visual Poetry

    Post  LokiBeragist on Wed Jan 06, 2010 3:21 pm

    These are not ordered poems, just little odes or free verse. I tend to avoid rhyming and such~

    About Dreams, because I can >D



    About a hallucination I had for a few years that went away recently



    Halloween shit



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    Re: Visual Poetry

    Post  Treble on Wed Jan 06, 2010 6:51 pm

    Reminds me of Tool-esque stuff.
    I like the Scarecrow one, being ominous

    I like the first the best though.
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    Re: Visual Poetry

    Post  LokiBeragist on Thu Jan 07, 2010 1:21 pm

    Treble wrote:Reminds me of Tool-esque stuff.
    I like the Scarecrow one, being ominous

    I like the first the best though.

    Dawww thanks. ^^

    The scarecrow one bugged me, I wanted four stanzas but couldnt get into it enough. It was meant for all audiences after all.

    There's that friendship one in the other art x3 I forgot to post it.


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    Post  Den on Thu Jan 07, 2010 1:28 pm

    I read them, but I'm mindless, so I can't give you specific critique...or can I? O_O

    ...Yeah, I can't. But I love the diction. All the words are just...cool. I'm not sure.

    I stopped liking Mutter halfway through. Can't tell you why though, not sure myself. lol


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    Re: Visual Poetry

    Post  LokiBeragist on Thu Jan 07, 2010 4:25 pm

    Den wrote:I read them, but I'm mindless, so I can't give you specific critique...or can I? O_O

    ...Yeah, I can't. But I love the diction. All the words are just...cool. I'm not sure.

    I stopped liking Mutter halfway through. Can't tell you why though, not sure myself. lol

    It's because you're Holden, and Holden is void of "I care" xD

    But thank you. I like concritiques too btw. It helps me see through the readers and I can judge their souls later c:


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